Revising+for+Comparision+&+Contrast+Essay

Now you will be REVISING!!!

Trade your papers to someone next to you.

Open the attachment and revise your partner's draft.



Then give the draft and revised paper back to the person and explain each one to your partner.

Now you need to revise your draft. 2nd Draft is due tomorrow. ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~

Now you will need to fix your 2nd Draft!

We will be focusing 4 our of 6 Traits of Writing!!!

**Ideas** - make sure you have all your ideas down. Share with other students and see if you need more ideas. If you need more ideas, then add them in your draft.

**Organization** - Make sure your draft has a lead that grabs the reader's attention, a thesis statement that clearly states the purpose, ideas and details that support the thesis and a conclusion.

**Voice** - Make sure your writing doesn't sound like an encyclopedia article. Make sure it has your feelings in your draft (show your humor, sadness or excitement). If your draft is boring, it may be lacking Voice. You could ask your friend/classmate for some ideas to make it better.

**Word Choice** - Make sure your vocabulary words are the best words to use for your draft. Find some great words from a thesaurus! You could create a "dead word" list - a list of words to avoid. You could look for all the words from your draft and make a list of "dead words" and then substitute words for the words on your "dead list." (Example: Cute = adorable, hate =detest).

Once you add "ideas, organization, voice and word choice" and then work on #3 revised draft. Two different ways to revise

1. Start with a blank page and rewrite your whole essay

2. Open your saved document and make changes.

Rule: Your 3rd revised draft MUST look very different that your second draft.

3rd Draft is due at the end of class.